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PostSubject: Dragon Heart   Sun Jan 20, 2008 12:46 am

This is my new story.


Dragon Heart

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The rain beat heavily upon my leathery wings. Warm liquid dripped down my front legs. I panicked and beat my wings faster, the wind pushing me back. My vision blurred and my wings quit. I fell a long way down, hitting the ground with a bang. The last thing I see is a man of about 20 years old standing in front of me and I close my eyes. My heart beat slows and I relax. The man is touching my muzzle, stroking it calmly. I hear the shuffle of his feet. He is at my side. He touches the wound and I growl in pain. I speak in dragon tongue but he ignores it, he canít understand it. I hear a ripping noise and feel him wrap something soft around the wound. He is helping me. He whispers into my large ear and I sleep.

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PostSubject: Re: Dragon Heart   Wed Jan 30, 2008 12:39 am

Hm...
I think it's very interesting, and I encourage you to write more. ^^

I would say the only thing that I see "wrong" or "confusing" about it, is all the "I's, Me's, and My's". Maybe get something else. I guess I am just not used to seeing stories that are written in first person.

Maybe this book with help you out. It's called "The Lovely Bones." I forgot who it's bye, but it is also written in first person, and I <33 it!
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PostSubject: Re: Dragon Heart   Tue Jun 16, 2009 3:29 pm

I found out that there was already a movie called Dragonheart. I rewrote everything and it is no longer in first person. I'll post a part of it later.

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PostSubject: Re: Dragon Heart   Thu Jun 25, 2009 4:53 pm

The movie was quite good, honestly it could have had Sean Connery(the titular dragon) in a monologue about how he was the 'last'(until the sequel) of his kind and the greed of humans.
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PostSubject: Re: Dragon Heart   Thu Jun 25, 2009 5:41 pm

Lol dragonheart's a really good movie. I suggest you watch it, oh fearless leader.
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